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雅思写作7分怎样拿到
[2012/2/22]    发布:环球雅思    浏览:1974
现在的年轻人总是会发出“理想很丰满,现实很骨感”这样的感叹,来表达对现实生活的无奈。而在雅思写作考试中,考生们又何尝不会经历这种无奈呢?写作7分是许多考生梦寐以求的分数,但即使是一些外籍教师所撰写的范文,在考官笔下也不过是7-8分!对于国内大多数雅思考生而言,7分似乎是可望而不可及的。那么,究竟怎样的文章,才能得到考官的青睐,最终幸运的得到7分的分数呢?

  一.Task response

  1. 具体要求

  Task response表示任务的完成。在官方给出的评分标准中,7分有这样的要求:

  1. Address all parts of the task,

  2. Present a clear position throughout the response,

  3. Present, extend and support main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus.

  ① 回答了题目要求的所有问题。②整篇文章观点鲜明。③详细的解释和论证了观点。

  2. 范例评析

  ▲ 剑桥雅思全真试题7 Test2 Task2

  Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment.

  Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

  1. 考生需要对题目中的两个相反的观点进行分析,不能只分析自己倾向的观点。即:固定不变的定罪制度有何作用;依据犯罪动机和环境灵活的定罪制度有何作用。

  2. 考生需要非常清楚的表明自己的观点,即回答应当如何对罪犯的犯罪行为定罪。

  3. 考生对于题目中两个相反观点的分析需要摆出充足的论据,提出自己的理由并通过例子来证明。

  7.5分考生范文选段:对固定不变的定罪制度的分析

  On the one hand, fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society. ‖Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime will reconsider committing this act in the first place. ‖This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crimes committed. ‖If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.

  1. 观点:固定的惩罚制度对社会有威慑力。(fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society。)

  2. 理由:考虑犯罪成本(reconsider committing crimes in the first place)

  3. 扩展结果:有利于社会稳定(lead to social stability and security through minimizing the number of crimes committed.)

  4. 理由:如果没有固定的定罪制度,会使犯罪分子更猖狂。(If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having committed the crime they are accused of , penal decisions would be largely arbitrary.)

  5. 扩展结果:犯罪分子逍遥法外,不利于司法公正。(criminals getting away with their crimes and a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.)

  3. 对策

  ① 复习真题,找生词

  在考题中,经常出现核心词汇的重复,比如:distance learning, criminal等。建议考生们可以在复习写作时,先把近两年的写作题目过一遍,查查生词。这样做可以大大降低考生在作文题中遭遇生词的尴尬,提高审题的准确性。

  ②掌握不同题型大作文的写作重点

  观点类:可以支持、反对、中立,一定要表达自己的观点。论据要充分,举例不可或缺。

  分析解决类:所问即所答,重点分析原因,解决方法多角度。

  ③八大话题,重点突破

  在考题中,“教育,科技,环保,全球化,政府,媒体,工作,社会生活”为常考的八大话题。复习重点有以下几方面:1. 每个话题的核心词汇要烂熟于心。2. 每个话题要积累至少两个可以作举例论证的实例。3. 每个话题至少选择两道题目做brainstorming思路拓展练习。4. 每个话题要至少积累两篇范文。5. 每个考生对自己不熟悉的话题,要加强以上练习。

  二. Coherence and cohesion

  1. 具体要求

  Coherence and cohesion表示连贯统一。在官方给出的评分标准中,7分有这样的要求:

  1. Logically organizes information and ideas; there is a clear progression throughout

  2. Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under/over-use

  3. Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

  ①文章结构富有逻辑性。②正确使用多种衔接方法。③每段话的中心思想明确。

  2. 范例评析

  ▲ 剑桥雅思全真试题7 Test2 Task2

  Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment.

  Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

  7.5分考生范文选段:考生回答应当如何对罪犯的犯罪行为定罪。

  In my opinion an intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justice and equity. There have to be fixed punishment for all crimes. However, criminal laws have to provide for a minimum and maximum for the punishment and the laws also have to foresee certain cases of exemptions. An example for setting minimum and maximum penalties is Competition Law where a person being held liable of a crime under this law will be convicted to pay a fine, according to the harm caused by the violation and the profit gained by the violator through committing the crime. As for the exemptions, in some countries the law exempts thieves stealing food during a period of famine taking into consideration the distress and hunger. Also, a person killing in self-defense will be exempted from punishment.

  1. 中心思想:对于犯罪分子的定罪应该有折中的方法,这才是保证公平公正的方法。(an intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justice and equity.)

  2. 段落结构一分为二:

  ①固定下来定罪的底线和上线,举例“竞争法”。

  ②定罪要有免罪的特殊处理。举例“饥荒时偷食物的行为”和“正当防卫”。

  3. 衔接的处理:文中加粗的部分(包含连接词,代词等)。

  3. 对策

  ①代词

  代词包括人称代词,物主代词和一些特定的词语。代词的使用能够提高表达的统一性。

  ②同义词,反义词等意义相互关联的词

  恰当使用一些相关或相同概念的词,能够达到整篇文章自然扩展的效果。

  ③连接词

  连接词是实现段落内部表达连贯的最主要的手段。它能够增进句与句,或者段与段之间的逻辑关系。

  三.Lexical resource

  1. 具体要求

  Lexical resource表示词汇。在官方给出的评分标准中,7分有这样的要求:

  1. Uses sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

  2. Uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

  3. May produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation

  ①灵活并且准确使用各种词汇。②正确搭配和使用不太普通的短语。

  2. 范例评析

  ▲ 剑桥雅思全真试题7 Test2 Task2

  Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment.

  Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

  7.5分考生范文选段:固定不变的定罪制度和分情况灵活的定罪制度

  On the one hand, fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society. Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime will reconsider committing this act in the first place. This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crimes committed. If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.

  On the other hand, taking the circumstance of a crime and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for establishing and ensuring justice and equity. A person killing in self-defense cannot be compared to a serial killer, moving from one victim to the next.

  1. 词汇的多样使用:

  ①认为consider 重新考虑reconsider 思考consideration

  ②惩罚(动词)Punish 惩罚(名词)punishment 惩罚的penal

  ③犯罪Crime 罪犯criminal

  2. 短语的多样使用:

  ①服从be subject to

  ②判罪be convicted with

  ③犯罪commit crimes

  ④判决某人有某罪convince sb of sth

  ⑤方法the approach of

  ⑥考虑到take sth into consideration

  ⑦被指控be accused of

  ⑧前提a prerequisite for

  ⑨与某事相提并论be compared to

  ⑩理由reason for

  3. 对策

  ①题干核心词与短语

  “题干核心词与短语”是指在每个话题的题目中,会有一些出现频率比较高的名词或短语。雅思议论文题目虽多,但是可以按话题分为八大类:教育,科技,环境与动物,媒体与广告,政府,工作与生活,语言与文化,法律与犯罪。复习以雅思写作机经为主,关注近两年的写作题目。

  ②素材核心词与短语

  “素材核心词与短语”主要是指某一类话题作文常会论证的角度,一般是由一些“实意词”为主。建议考生按照话题大量研读范文的主题句或是支持句,去积累和总结。

  四.Grammatical range and accuracy

  1. 具体要求

  Grammatical range and accuracy表示语法的准确性和多样性。在官方给出的评分标准中,7分有这样的要求:

  1. Uses a variety of complex structures

  2. Produces frequent error-free sentences

  3. Has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

  ①能够使用各种复合结构。②句子无语法错误。③能够正确使用语法和标点。

  2. 范例评析

  ▲ 剑桥雅思全真试题7 Test2 Task2

  Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment.

  Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

  7.5分考生范文选段:

  On the one hand, fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society. Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime will reconsider committing this act in the first place. This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crimes committed. If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.

  On the other hand, taking the circumstance of a crime and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for establishing and ensuring justice and equity. A person killing in self-defense cannot be compared to a serial killer, moving from one victim to the next.

  1. 非谓语

  ①On the one hand, fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society.

  ②This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crimes committed.

  ③This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.

  ④A person killing in self-defense cannot be compared to a serial killer, moving from one victim to the next.

  2. 虚拟语气

  ①If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary.

  ②This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.

  3. 对策

  ①避免常见语法错误

  常见语法错误有:双谓语;介词搭配;并列结构。

  ②三大从句

  熟练使用三大从句:名词性从句,状语从句,定语从句。

  ③特殊句型

  倒装句,强调句,独立主格,非谓语。

  最后,再次提醒考生:雅思作文阅卷考官全部是受过系统培训的native speaker, 具有丰富的批阅雅思作文的经验,他们对中国学生存在的问题有相当全面的了解。因此,如果中国考生想要获取作文7分,就必须根据自己的情况制定详细的备考计划并持之以恒。毋庸置疑,这终将是一场硬仗!

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